June 16, 2004

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The prize this week goes to...

...is Jimmie!

If you want to know who had each entry you can ask. I am not going to post each entry. Congrats Jimmie. I took a screenshot but I'm too lazy to post it and actually too busy at work.

Please email to me by Noon CST tomorrow your votes for the next person off the Island.

Posted by Pylorns at June 16, 2004 12:00 PM | TrackBack


Congrats Jimmie!
Knew it was yours
Question is, who gets voted off next? I hate this bit...

Posted by: Lemurgirl at June 16, 2004 10:13 PM

Way to go Jimmie! At least you didn't have me tied to a tree ;-)

Posted by: Lynn at June 17, 2004 01:01 AM

Congrats Jimmy. I hate this part too Lemur. :(

Posted by: Gennie at June 17, 2004 01:30 AM

Congratulations, Jimmie!

Guess I'll be seeing y'all later, at the last Tribal Council.

Posted by: Victor at June 17, 2004 08:25 AM

Lynn - I could arrange that, if you really wanted. ;)

Thanks guys, and everyone who voted for my entry. You guys put up some really tough competition this round - I mean REALLY tough!

Now I shall do the Dance of Joy - at least until I figure out who who I have to vote off. :(

Posted by: Jimmie at June 17, 2004 08:28 AM

Congrats, Jimmie. Excellent writing.

What's with the "Group hug!" theme going on here? I'm getting this pink floral vibe and it's really disturbing.

Serious feedback for almost everybody: Your entries are too verbose. You ever have somebody tell you a really long and involved joke with a punchline that would have been much funnier if the joke was only half as long? These entries are sort of like that. Remember that voters are being asked to read an entry from each person so very long entries make a large reading committment. You want your entry to be fairly evaluated, make it as attractive to the voter/reader as possible.

Posted by: Jim at June 17, 2004 09:12 AM

yes, albiet very good, very long winded. This time I think we did get more people voting though...

Posted by: pylorns at June 17, 2004 09:15 AM

I agree, but share the blame, Pylorns. The challenges have invited (nay, demanded!) verbosity. "Animals" implies more than one, which implies verbosity. "...if they are good to eat and what names you have given the animals. How do you catch them? Are they preditors or herbavores? Do they all taste like chicken? Who on the island gets the first kill? Who can cook?" There are FIVE questions there, along with requests for their names and if they're good to eat! Please note we pretty much ignored most of those questions, but still.

"Tell us what happens" suggests a story (and therefore, verbosity), not a paragraph.

OK, I could've said, "Nader and LaRouche had a debate on the island, the end," but I doubt I would've gotten the four votes I got.

Think back to some of the challenges in Survivor I (IIRC--I'm not going to bother checking the probably still FUBAR'd archives): "Think of a slogan for 'Anger Management'"; "Don has been late on more than one occasion. Determine his punishment." Those did *not* invite long essays!

Jim, you're right: I was thinking it should be like a resumé, but ya know...I don't see how the challenges we've been issued could've been met in a dozen sentences.

Posted by: Victor at June 17, 2004 10:52 AM

Oh, don't get me wrong. I like a good read and wouldn't want just a couple paragraphs for these challenges. There's just a goodly bit of fat that could be trimmed.

Posted by: Jim at June 17, 2004 11:06 AM

Got it, Jim, but your statement sounds vaguely familiar:

Emperor Joseph II: Your work is ingenious. It's quality work. And there are simply too many notes, that's all. Just cut a few and it will be perfect.
Wolfgang Amadeus Mozart: Which few did you have in mind, Majesty?

Posted by: Victor at June 17, 2004 11:42 AM

And I was starting too feel bad because I thought my entries were too short!

Posted by: Lynn at June 17, 2004 01:18 PM

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